Bradangelo

Western New Yorkers, myself included, love to bowl, which is how a bowling alley renovation becomes front page sports news in the Lockport Union-Sun & Journal.  Too bad nobody read over the story before it went to print.  Sure, journalists are trained to pack a lot of information in right away, but, really!  After you get past the dangly feel of the headline, read the opening paragraph.  Tighten it up, people!  And learn the difference between "sight" and "site" (and "cite," while you're at it.)

One tip I enthusiastically give my students is to remove the word "thing" from their writing.  There is always  a way to be more specific.  Please, Mister Reporter, when you revise, you can take the time to think just a little bit harder and get rid of any form of "thing," "stuff," "or whatever."

Let me know what you think of this thing...er...article:

Lockport Union-Sun & Journal, August 17, 2012.
First part of the article only, which was the most horrendous.  If you're that interested in the bowling alley to want to read the second part, you can message me or look it up yourself.